Wonderful. Interspersing frivolity with the seriousness, I loved how you almost went off on a tangent in the bar (which allowed a little familiarity with the characters - especially Dean's whorish approach to girls, and I love how he slunk off to Remy afterward) and then looped it all back round again. Lovely construction of character, too, but I have to admit Tante looked like Missouri in my head +_+
The fact there's only one bit left to go is almost downright depressing.
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Date: 2009-05-13 04:36 pm (UTC)The fact there's only one bit left to go is almost downright depressing.